Recording Feedback/Critique

[Ghost Hip]

Hey guys,

I'm getting to the point where I can listen to one of my recordings and not regret/want to change something. I figure this would be the perfect time to get some serious feedback as to what could be improved even though I may not have the technology to do it. I've recently gotten some decent headphones and that's really helped out with getting levels where I want them. (My last headphones had some low end problems so I'd end up cranking the bass in my recordings ) Anywho, I guess some general questions I have are:

-Are the vocals clear? I don't want them to be over the top pop present, but I don't want them to be mixed low like Loveless either. (there's lyrics on the sound cloud page if it helps)
-Do the transitions from verse to chorus, chorus to verse, to bridge, solo, etc. flow well?
-Does this combination of more electronic beats/synth with shoegazey/noisy guitars fit together good and dandy?

My recording is all direct in with Adobe Audition. Bass was done by my Korg DS-10 synth, drums fruity loops, guitars are guitars, and vocals are done with a really elementary microphone through my pedal board.

[soundcloud]http://soundcloud.com/russian-children/nine-you-got-it-wrong[/soundcloud]

Let me know what you think If you have any bands/songs that are along the same genre/style as this that you think I should look into, shoot them at me.
-Jared

[sonidero]

Man that is really a great track... I think all you need is some eqing to separate where the vocals and guitars overlap a lil to bring each out... The low end is good but maybe pan it a lil more to spread and compress the drums to make them have a lil more presence... Just constructive criticism tho, I really like it... The best part is the guitar part after the comments... Keep it up...

[kbit]

I feel like the some of the lead guitar is just a tad to quiet, especially in the sections without vocals. I wanna hear those fuzz textures nice and clear.

Other than that I think it's really good. I think you definitely achieved the mix of vocals you were after (present but not overt top) and all the transitions sound smooth.

[hclapp219]

On my speakers the drums felt more present than anything else, almost like it was a drum track with everything else in the background. Sounded better on my headphones. I would bring vocals and guitar up a tad and push drums back a tad. The song is awesome!

[kbit]

On my speakers the drums felt more present than anything else, almost like it was a drum track with everything else in the background. Sounded better on my headphones. I would bring vocals and guitar up a tad and push drums back a tad. The song is awesome!

I also agree with this, drums were above everything on my speakers but it sounded a bit more balanced on my headphones.

[Ghost Hip]

Thanks guys. I see what you mean about the drums and spreading the bass a bit more. I'll try and take a fresh listen and mix it later this week.